My Initial Plot Ideas

Here are two initial plot ideas that I came up with before deciding on my current Thriller opening

Idea one:

A girl (around 18 years old) has been on holiday with her four other friends and noticed that they have, one by one, been slowly disappearing mysteriously. Soon it is just the girl left and quick flashbacks are shown of the girl's friends being taken away as she walks down (at night) a deserted, wet road. In her hands she holds four pictures, each of them blurry but she can clearly see the horror and torture in them and believes that it is her friends in the picture and its happening to them. When holding the pictures she starts to hear voices, like echo's and it sounds like her friends so she follows the 'noise'. Soon the voices get louder and the girl looks up to see that she is at some sort of shack. She recognises the noises as her friends and on instinct , runs forward to the shack and hounds on the door. Suddenly the noises stop and the door slowly swings open, seeming to have no person that opened it. All is heard is the girl's breathing as she steps into the pitch black room, looking around. She hears creaks on the floor board. She starts to panic and tries to feel her way back to the door but can't it the dark. As she is walking back she steps on something and picks it up. It's a torch and she quickly picks it up and clicks it on to immediately reveal a man in a scary clown mask right in front of her face.

"You ready?" he asks her in a eerily cheery and playful voice.

The girl is paralysed with fear as she looks down behind her and see's her friends dead on the floor, all organised in the shape of a cross (Christianity one). Just as the girl is about to scream the clown grabs her hair and drags her down. Then it cuts to black.


Idea two

A family: Mother, Father, Sister, Brother. They recently moved into an old abandoned house and immediately raise suspicions from the tight community neighbourhood. The kids from the strange house go to school and soon weird things seem to start happening to the kids there. This makes people more suspicious but the they do not outright accuse the family. However, after one of the kids has a sleepover at the mysterious house because she made friends with one of the kids and dies the next day at school, people start accusing the family of poisoning the girl the day before. They say that the caretaker that found her saw froth coming from her mouth. The family deny everything but their short answers and tendency to hide away makes their denial unbelievable. Suddenly, the caretakers son dies and eventually the people decide to create a mob and march up to their house. The mob murders the family who are defenceless and try to deny everything before their deaths. As they are turning away, grateful that the problem in their town is gone, the caretaker speaks.

"Let's hope they burn in the Cyanide they poisoned that little girl with"

The mob will turn around and look at the caretaker confused. One of the people speaks "You said it was bleach before"

It is then everyone realises that it was the caretaker not the mysterious family. The realisation sets in that they just killed innocent people and it fade's to black.